請求幫忙修改英語作文。。。

作者：由匿名使用者發表于動漫
2023-01-16

寫了作文，可是不知道怎麼修改。。對著參考答案也只能看到別人的思路，不知道自己的問題究竟在哪裡。。十分希望有朋友可以幫我看看，給我指正！

題目是：

Directions： Supposeyou are going to study abroad and share an apartment with John， a local student。Write him to email to

1）tell him about your living habits， and

2）ask for advice about living there。

我的答案是：

Dear John，

I am your newroommate who come from China a different country form yours in the futureschool life。 It is a very exciting things for me studying and living abroad butfill of much difficult ，so I would like to communicate you with my livinghabits。 First of all， I am a quiet guy ， can not tolerant noisy ，but music arewelcome。 Secondly， I am crazy in tidy ，even need a long time to taking shower。 Last，I did not foster a good habits so I always sleep late in the night。 This is thefirst time I go abroad， I do not much about your country and the life there，can you give me some advice about living there ？ I expect your message as soon as possible。

Yours

Li Ming

米蘭小仙子 2014-07-30

Dear John，

I am your newroommate， I come from Chinese， we are in different countries。 This is myliving and studying in a foreign country is very difficult to butfill very exciting， so I want you to communicate with my livinghabits。 Secondly， I am a quiet person， cannot toleratenoisy， I want to say to you： I do not develop good habits in there， so I always go to bed late in the evening。 This is my first time to go abroad， I don‘t know about your country，where there is life， can you give me some suggestions， tell where I live？ This is my first time to go abroad， I still don’t know about your country， where there is life， can you giveme some advice？ I‘m looking forward to hearing from you soon。

Your friend

Li Ming

格式你再改一下，望採納